Reunion WIP (Gumi & Avanna)

AViolet

Aspiring Producer
Sep 29, 2020
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Hello. I'm looking for some feedback on a song I'm making that's a duet between Gumi Eng and Avanna. I deeply appreciate absolutely any constructive criticism. Currently I'm thinking that perhaps the vocals are mixed too loudly. The only parameters that I have adjusted so far are Dynamics and a bit of Opening parameter. I am wondering how to make Avanna sound more clear. This is very much a rough draft. I'm going to also post the lyrics along with the Drive link as I'm aware there are clarity issues.

Link to draft:
Lyrics:
Avanna:

This isn't
Just a dream
No, I'm here
Suddenly, I can't speak
You are right there
Telling me
I should leave
I don't see
Why you'd say such a thing

After all this time
Chasing what I'd never find
At least that's what it felt like
But now I'm here with you

Gumi:

Do you understand
That this might be your only chance?
If you don't wake up now
You can't return to your existence

Avanna:

Maybe I don't even want to stay
If I'm here with you, then it's okay
There's nothing that I'm leaving behind
What do I have to do to prove
that I'm fine?

Gumi:

Why do you want to give up your life?
You only have one, it's not alright
I didn't save you only to see
You give up everything to stay here with me

Avanna:

This isn't
Just a dream
No, I'm here
Does that mean
That I soon
Will disappear?
Should I stay?
Should I wake?
It does ache
To wonder such a thing

Avanna:

But in the end I can't pull away
If I'm here with you, then it's okay
Forget the things I'm leaving behind
Wash them away, let them fade out of my mind
Gumi: (Please wake up now
Please wake up now
This is how
It will end)


Gumi:
Why do you want to give up your life?
This wasn't my wish, it's not alright
I can still save you, but I'm sorry
This is the last time you and I can meet
Avanna: (I wanted to
I wanted to
See you just once again)

Apologies for the long post, thank you so much for taking the time to listen. <3
 

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