That's some seriously nice work. GJ! It's very nice generally, but I think you did particularly well on her body and arms. And her face. ...Well, everything's generally good. :) The jewelry is really detailed and is a nice touch!
If you're still looking for feedback
- Consider making the outside of her right arm (the arm on the left side of the paper) more rounded. Her left is really nice, but the outside of her right looks a little flat, and it shows up in the curve of her right shoulder, as well. This is actually a familiar problem for me, as I've seen it show up the few times I've tried drawing people, too. (I'll just bet you're right-handed. :) It's just an untested theory of mine, but I'd guess there's some sort of bias that exists for people who draw that makes it harder for them to work on the side of the paper that's opposite their dominant hand.)
- Check on the position of her ear--I think it should be higher up. On a live person, I think the tops of the ears are a little under being in line with the tops of their eyes, though I suppose that varies from person to person. Then again, this is an anime-style person, too, so the eyes are a good deal bigger than they are in real life--I'm not sure what anime does with the ear-eye relationship. I think her ear should maybe be a little bit bigger, too (maybe 10-20%?).
- Maybe adjust where the curve for the right side of her chest begins to better match the outline of the left side of her chest.
- This is debatable, but think about the fold/wrinkle lines in the fabric on her right side--I think maybe they're going up at too sharp of an angle. Why would the folds on that side be so much different from the ones on her left?
- Maybe smooth out her right pigtail a little--the curve on the lower half seems too deep/comes to too much of a peak at the top to be just how her hair naturally hangs.
All that said, you still did a great job! I'm no artist at all--I just wanted to try to be helpful.
If you're concerned about inking, would it be possible to make copies of your original and try practicing from those? A photocopier would probably be too dark, but if you have or know someone who has a scanner attached to their computer, you can get some really good-fidelity copies off of those--potentially good enough to be confusable with your original. Inking those would probably be good practice, and you could make as many copies as you felt like making. Heck, even the picture you posted here, printed on computer paper, would probably be good enough for practicing on.
